On a calm day Jason and Pebble (The dog) went for a walk down to the dock and they sat on a very cold and damp rock. They we’re skipping rocks into the water. Suddenly the lighthouse went on. Pebble was as soft as a german shepard. Jason was wearing blue jeans and a black jacket. They were skipping rocks into the calm water. The seagulls were flying around the air.
On a bitter cold day Joe and John (the dog). Joe took John for a walk down to the beach, they arrived at the beach. Then Joe opened his mouth he could taste the sand. He could also hear all of the seagulls, they both sat on a cold damp rock. Out far away they saw a lighthouse. All of a sudden the lighthouse went on.
On one freezing cold day Zane (The man) and Gabriel (The dog) they both went to the beach.
I liked how you described the characters in your story. I think you could improve on by adding some more bolder words.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you described the people in your story.
ReplyDeleteSomething you could work on is adding more exciting words in your story.